Strange Magic Song

My SPECIAL PLACE....

MY SPECIAL PLACE

THE SEVENTH SAND DUNE ON THE LEFT OF THE PATH.

 I’m standing on a sand dune, overlooking the vast blue sea, rippling gently until it meets the sky. The sea breeze is gently blowing on my face, cooling it from the scorching sun that’s beating down.                                                                                                                                                                                                                                              In the distance, the seagulls swoop and squawk, fighting over a piece of food.

I taste the salt air on my lips, and I feel peaceful, relaxed and wonder how it feels to be a seagull gliding on the whispering wind, with no deadlines, no weeks, months, or even years.

I see a man with a sun hat, crooked back and a piece of driftwood for a walking stick slowly meandering. His golden labrador on the other hand, is bounding along, running circles around him, barking at waves and being a puppy again. It skips and splashes in the foaming water, barking and begging its master to throw the stick one more time.

A father and his boy gently wrestle a rainbow coloured kite as it skips and dances in the azure sky.

 I sit down on the warm sand and dig my heels in under the surface to the cooler sand, and squeeze it out again through my toes. I can smell the suntan lotion I had put on earlier, mixed with the sweat of the day. My shoulders are a toasty reddish brown colour, and they radiate the day’s warmth.

 I look down the beach and see a young couple walking along the sea edge. She has her head on his shoulder, her arm round him, he’s talking and smiling, his arm wraps around her like an eagle protecting its young.

 I think of my girlfriend who is far from me, across the seas in a different land. How many waves will crash on this shore before I’ll see her again? Still, it’s only a speck of sand in the time scale of things. It won’t be long before we are both sitting here, in our special place, embracing one another as we just be.

Mr. Aitken 2005 ©

Make a copy, name it ‘My Special Place’, and please put it in your correct English folder. ask if you’re unsure which folder that is.

1) From this piece of creative writing, highlight, in the corresponding colours, all the

(a) Similes

(b) Metaphors

(c) Personification

(d) Onomatopoeia

(e) Alliteration

2) Highlight the 5 senses

(a) Smells

(b) Sights

(c) Sounds

(d) Tastes

(e) Touches

3) Highlight the following parts of speech

(a) Noun

(b) Verb

(c) Adjective

(d) Adverb

(e) Contraction

(f) Rhetorical question

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The power of one ESSAY

INSTRUCTIONS Write an essay on at least ONE visual or oral text that you have studied, in

response to ONE of the questions below.

QUESTIONS (Choose ONE)

1. Describe at least one important object in the text. Explain why that object was important, supporting your points with visual and / or oral language features.

2. Describe one important moment in the text. Explain how that moment changed at least one important relationship or character, supporting your points with visual and / or oral language features.

3. Describe at least one important technique used in the text. Explain how the technique created an emotional response in you, supporting your points with visual and / or oral language features.

4. Describe the closing scene of the text. Explain how the closing scene helped you to understand at least one important aspect of the text, supporting your points with visual and / or oral language features.

5. Describe at least one important place in the text. Explain how that place helped you to understand an important message in the text, supporting your points with visual and / or oral language features.

6. Describe an important conflict in the text. Explain how the conflict helped you to understand an important message, supporting your points with visual and / or oral language features.

7. Describe at least one important character in the text. Explain how this character is revealed to you throughout the text, supporting your points with visual and / or oral language features.

8. Describe one key moment that helped to prepare you for another moment in the text. Explain how the first moment prepared you for the second, supporting your points with visual and / or oral language features.

I am going to answer essay question: _____

1. The object is the wip that the Nazis used to beat  the Africans with...

Gathering of Ideas: list you planning points here:

• How P.K. fell in love with Maria the first time he saw her for the first time.
• When P.K chicken got killed .
• When P.K. got peed on at school.
• When P.K. got tort how to box in the prison.

Organise your ideas here: What are your best ideas?

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Write an essay on ONE question above for ‘The Power of One’. Tie it all together with an introduction, SEXXXY paragraphs, and a conclusion, PLUS using the ‘GOLDEN’ elements for excellent writing including LINKING PARAGRAPHS, DESCRIPTIVE WORDS, ENABLING PHRASES and NEAT AND TIDY (which is actually making corrections for  punctuation, spelling and grammar!)

REMEMBER: You don’t have to do all of the SEXXXY paragraph. Do your best and try to Statement, Evidence, eXplanation of the EFFECT, and Your Link :) YOU”VE GOT THIS! Good luck!

Introduction

(a)Catch ‘em including text and author/director           (b)Thesis/Re-stating of essay question           (c)List of points                       Start writing here: I am going to talk about when p.k fell in love with Maria the first time he saw her.

Body

(a) Statement of a film techniques/aspect (b) Example/Evidence (c) eXplanation of EFFECT on audience - what does it make us think or feel?     And remember to answer the essay question! (d) eXplanation of director’s PURPOSE                                    (e) eXplanation of COMBINED ASPECTS - how does it work with other aspects?           (f) Your link - with evidence - how does it connect somewhere else?                                           1S) Today i am going to talk about when P.K fell in love with Marya the first time. E)   P.K. was having a boxing match and when he got hit in the face he hit his head and when he opened his eyes he  saw Maria standing there telling him to get back up the lighting on his was bright on one side and on the other side was dark…. X) For days P.K. would not stop talking about Maria to his friend he say how beautiful Maria was and P.K wanted to see to Maria again.But his friend said to P.K. that he had to get permission from Maria’s dad. So P.K. went and asked for Maria dad’s permission  to see Maria again but Maria’s dad said no.so P.K. respect Maria’s dad wishes and he went back to class... X) X Y

(a) Statement of a film techniques/aspect (b) Example/Evidence (c) eXplanation of EFFECT on audience - what does it make us think or feel? And remember to answer the essay question! (d) eXplanation of director’s PURPOSE                                    (e) eXplanation of COMBINED ASPECTS - how does it work with other aspects?           (f) Your link - with evidence - how does it connect somewhere else?   2S) When  P.K. was young he went to boarding school for the first time ever in his life when he hugged his mum the close up shot on P.K.’s face he was afraid and he and he tried to keep his tears back and he said his last good bye’s to his mum and his mum gave P.K. a speshul bracelet that P.K.’s dad gave his mum when they first fell in love. After him mum gave P.K. the bracelet P.K’s nanny helped in the back of the truck P.K. hugged his nanny for the last time and his nanny said good bye for the last time. It was hard for P.K.. E) When P.K was had school he started wetting the bed but one night a Nazi soldier told P.K. that his mum had died so P.K, went back home to bury his mum and say good bye for the last time... X X X Y

(a) Statement of a film techniques/aspect (b) Example/Evidence (c) eXplanation of EFFECT on audience - what does it make us think or feel?    And remember to answer the essay question! (d) eXplanation of director’s PURPOSE                                    (e) eXplanation of COMBINED ASPECTS - how does it work with other aspects?           (f) Your link - with evidence - how does it connect somewhere else?   3S E X X X Y

(a) Statement of a film techniques/aspect (b) Example/Evidence (c) eXplanation of EFFECT on audience - what does it make us think or feel?   And remember to answer the essay question! (d) eXplanation of director’s PURPOSE                                    (e) eXplanation of COMBINED ASPECTS - how does it work with other aspects?           (f) Your link - with evidence - how does it connect somewhere else?   (Optional) 4S   E X X X Y

Conclusion

(a) Re-stating of the essay question (b) Re-stating of list of reasons (c) Punch line

Junior Assessment Schedule for Film, Written, and Formal Writing Essays

Progressions: Overall Grade:	Level 3 Indicators L M H	Level 4 Indicators L M H	Level 5 Indicators L M H	Level 6 Indicators L M H
Ideas/Purposes and Audiences Nb* L=Low M=Medium H=High SEXY SEXXY or SEXXXY!	I have expressed ideas and used statements, evidence, and explanations and attempted to answer the question with some aspects of SEXY paragraphs. I have shown commitment and resilience in my learning by adding or changing details to support my ideas.	I have formed and communicated ideas by using statements, evidence, and explanations and attempted to answer the question with SEXY paragraphs. I have shown commitment and resilience to my learning by adding or changing details to support my ideas.	I show increasingly comprehensive ideas by using statements, evidence, and explanations correctly to answer the question in  1-2 SEXY paragraphs. I have developed my  ideas by adding details or making links to the text, other texts, society, or the world.	I show comprehensive ideas by using statements, evidence, and explanations correctly to answer the question in 3 or more SEXY paragraphs. I have worked towards creating a coherent, planned whole essay by adding details to ideas or making links to the text, other texts, society, or the world.
Ideas/Purposes And Audiences Grade:	L M H	L M H	L M H	L M H
Language Features (Persuasive, filmic, or written, depending upon the essay.) I have used Google add-ons, extensions, and apps to proofread and edit my work	I have used descriptive words and language features to engage interest and communicate meaning. I have used grammatical and spelling conventions, appropriately and with increasing accuracy.	I have used a range of descriptive words and language features to create meaning and effect and to sustain interest. I have used grammatical and spelling conventions, appropriately and with only a few intrusive errors.	I have used a wide range of descriptive words and language features with control to create meaning and effect and to sustain interest. I have used an increasing range of words and  grammatical and spelling conventions  appropriately, effectively, and with accuracy.	I have used a wide range of descriptive words and language features with control to create meaning and effect and to sustain interest. I have used grammatical and spelling conventions  appropriately, effectively, and with accuracy.
Language Features Grade:	L M H	L M H	L M H	L M H
Structure	I have achieved sequences my ideas with SEXY paragraphs. I may have linked my paragraphs, and have an intro, body, and conclusion.	I have achieved some coherence through sequencing my ideas with SEXY paragraphs. I may have linked my paragraphs, and have an intro, body, and conclusion.	I have achieved a sense of coherence through developing my ideas with SEXY paragraphs. I probably have linked my paragraphs, and have an intro, body, and conclusion.	I have achieved a sense of coherence through developing my ideas with SEXY paragraphs. I probably have linked my paragraphs, and an intro, body, and conclusion.
Structure Grade:	L M H	L M H	L M H	L M H

Junior Assessment Schedule for Film, Written, and Formal Writing Essays